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Read the following formal letter and cross out the inappropriate phrases in bold. (Прочитайте официальное письмо и вычеркните неподходящие выражения, выделенные жирным.)
Dear Sir / Madam,
- I'm writing about the job you advertised/I am writing with reference to the 'Summer Camp Assistants' job vacancy that was advertised in Friday's edition of The Evening News.
I am 18 years old and 2) at the moment I am doing my A levels/I am currently studying for my A levels at Marton Sixth Form College. I am hoping to study Psychology at university next year and would like to specialise in Child Psychology.
I hold a life-saving certificate and a first aid certificate. 3) I would welcome the opportunity/I really want to work with young children during the summer holidays.
I have been a member of the Girl Guides since the age of 10. I joined the senior section when I was 14 and, two years ago, I became a Young Leader. I have really enjoyed helping younger Girl Guides prepare for their badges.
I am a keen swimmer and I enjoy sailing. I note with interest that children at the summer camp can participate in water sports and sailing activities. I feel that with my qualifications and experience 4) I would be suitable for the position advertised/I'd be great for this job. - Please find enclosed/Here is a letter of recommendation from the leader of my Girl Guide unit. I hope you will consider my application favourably.
- I look forward to hearing from you/It'd be great to hear from you soon.
Yours faithfully,
Sarah White
Решение
Это официальное письмо (formal letter), поэтому нужен нейтральный и вежливый стиль: без сокращений (I'm, I'd, it'd), без разговорных слов (really want, great, here is). Выбираем формальный вариант и вычёркиваем неформальный.
- Оставляем I am writing with reference to ... (полная форма, формальное «в связи с»); вычёркиваем I'm writing about the job you advertised (сокращение, разговорно).
- Оставляем I am currently studying for my A levels («в настоящее время»); вычёркиваем at the moment I am doing my A levels (разговорно).
- Оставляем I would welcome the opportunity («буду рад возможности»); вычёркиваем I really want to work (слишком прямо, эмоционально).
- Оставляем I would be suitable for the position advertised; вычёркиваем I'd be great for this job (сокращение, разговорное great).
- Оставляем Please find enclosed («прилагаю»); вычёркиваем Here is.
- Оставляем I look forward to hearing from you; вычёркиваем It'd be great to hear from you soon.
Ответ
Вычеркнуть (неформальные варианты):
- I'm writing about the job you advertised — оставить I am writing with reference to ...
- at the moment I am doing my A levels — оставить I am currently studying for my A levels
- I really want to work — оставить I would welcome the opportunity
- I'd be great for this job — оставить I would be suitable for the position advertised
- Here is — оставить Please find enclosed
- It'd be great to hear from you soon — оставить I look forward to hearing from you
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